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Descriptive Essay代寫范文-《船上的午宴》

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  • 作者:致遠教育
  • 導讀:本文是一篇DescriptiveEssay代寫范文,本文主要采用了意識流的寫法,從自己的感受出發,描寫了在這場派對中的所見所感。文章結構清晰,分視覺、聽覺、嗅覺和味覺四個方面,每種感官一個paragraph,首尾的introduction和conclusion也恰到好處。用詞方面生動準確,句式富有變化,整篇文章非常優美。
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案例詳情

本文是一篇Descriptive Essay代寫范文,題目Luncheon of the Boating Party。本文主要采用了意識流的寫法,從自己的感受出發,描寫了在這場派對中的所見所感。文章結構清晰,分視覺、聽覺、嗅覺和味覺四個方面,每種感官一個body paragraph,首尾的introduction和conclusion也恰到好處。用詞方面生動準確,句式富有變化,整篇文章非常優美。

《船上的午宴》畫作

Luncheon of the Boating Party

Introduction(開頭段)

Boarding the boat, I saw the group of guests already dining delightfully. Monsieur Renoir must have spent a huge amount of money on this luncheon. No, this is not something that can be seen alone; thou shall hear, smell and taste as well.

首段,作者首先總體描述了船上有一群客人在愉快地進餐,作者雷諾阿一定為這頓大餐花費不菲,然后提出了中心論點(Thesis statement):這幅場景不但可以看,還可以聽、聞和嘗。

Body Paragraph 1(主體段1)

Just by looking at the scene, it is evident that the party is remarkably luxurious. Bottles and bottles of first-class wine, bought exclusively for this party, stood erect on the table. Delicious food, including fruits and vegetables as well as French dishes, was served to everyone. Different colours spread all over the table; purple from grapes, green from pears, red from apples, yellow from cheese… Gorgeous, restless colours, dancing, tangling, flying from here to there, mixing together. Oh, is this beauty not something beyond the language of humans? For even using the word “dazzling” would be like comparing the light of a candle to Apollo himself.

在第一個主體段落中,作者從視覺出發,描述了所見到的一切:各種美酒、美食、繽紛的色彩。

接下來,作者用了一句反問:Oh, is this beauty not something beyond the language of humans?(啊,這難道不是人類語言無法描繪的一種美妙嗎)這句話非常具有感染力,喚起讀者與作者一起走入這幅畫,感受這種美妙。

最后,作者用一句比喻結束:For even using the word “dazzling” would be like comparing the light of a candle to Apollo himself.(就連用“炫目”來形容都只不過像是用燭光比喻太陽神阿波羅一樣遜色。)

Body Paragraph 2(主體段2)

I closed my eyes and listened carefully. On the boat, I could hear chitchats, laughter and sounds of chewing, striking from every identifiable direction. When I walked closer to the edge, nonetheless, I can even hear the sound of the waves splashing, the birds singing, the bullrush shaking with the breezes blowing gently… Everything just seems so loud, yet so quiet; so insignificant, yet so lively. It feels human, like a part of a welcoming community.

第二個主體段落,作者切換到聽覺。值得注意的是,作者都是從自己角度出發,用"I can…", "When I...",描寫了聽到的聊天聲、笑聲、咀嚼聲、敲擊聲從各個方向傳來,走到船邊,還能聽到波浪濺起水花的聲音、鳥兒的鳴叫聲、蘆葦隨著微風擺動的聲音……

最后一句,作者用一個比喻繼續描寫自己的感受:這場派對充滿了人情味,就像是一個熱情團體的一部分。

這也是descriptive essay寫作的一個要點:結合自己的感受,并代入自己的情感,會令你的文章更有感染力。

Body Paragraph 3(主體段3)

Suddenly I smelled something. Was it the very fine soupe à l’oignon? Or was it the cassoulet? Eh, bien - it was the latter. The very smell of cooked meat, combined with the smell of wine, fresh fruits and Mother Nature herself, is the finest scent in the whole La Troisième République, if not the world!

第三個主體段,作者動用了嗅覺。法式洋蔥湯、豆燜肉、美酒、新鮮水果與大自然的氣味混合在一起,真是太美妙的芬芳

在這段中,作者又采取了與前兩段不同的寫法,巧妙地變換句式,以設問句開始:Was it the very fine soupe à l’oignon? Or was it the cassoulet? 并自問自答。“哦這香氣是法式洋蔥湯嗎?還是豆燜肉?嗯,是豆燜肉。”將自己內心活動的寫照生動地傳遞給了讀者。

Body Paragraph 4(主體段4)

Monsieur Laforgue!” I turned around and saw a waiter holding a tray walking towards me. “Here is your portion, sir. Please enjoy!” “Ah, merci!” I cried as the busy waiter left to serve other guests. The irresistible colour and smell of the cassoulet tempted me to have a bite. As soon as I put it into my mouth, the high-quality meat melted like gelato; the taste is extraordinary. I poured myself a glass of wine and took a sip; the bitter taste of wine, along with the taste of the cassoulet, lingers on my tongue.

在最后一個主體段中,作者更進一步,用對話帶讀者走入繪畫,讓眼前的場景活了起來。緊接著,作者又品嘗了美食和美酒,向我們描述了那令人回味無窮的美味,讓我們如同置身其境,和作者一同親臨了這場盛大的派對。

Conclusion(結論段)

Ah, what a wonderful party indeed! Not only can colours be seen, but also voices can be heard and food can be tasted. With all my senses used, I can genuinely feel the lively and fascinating party with all parts of my heart.

在最后的結論段,作者感嘆到這真是一場絕妙的派對??!他寫道,動用所有的感官,他可以全身心地感受到這場派對的生氣與迷醉,對主體段落四種感官進行了總結和升華。

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